ตัวอย่างการตรวจ English Proofreading & Editing (Sample#9)

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I am a fast-learning, highly-organized and self-motivated person who is passionate about developing my skills in airline related field, and I have ability of good English communication for airlines, good interpersonal and good customer relation skills.

I am a fast-learning, highly-organized and self-motivated individual who is passionate about developing my professional skills. I have good English communication abilities, which are essential in the airline industry for good interpersonal and customer relations.

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